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we played the game
like a dance
across the dancefloor
it was sweet
i bit my lip
for you
to taste the bitterness in my mouth
that is how serious
of a play it was
round and round
it was a good tango
and
finished with the most violent of moves
a tear would run down
my surprised face
i was only defeated
when you made me come
like a dance
across the dancefloor
it was sweet
i bit my lip
for you
to taste the bitterness in my mouth
that is how serious
of a play it was
round and round
it was a good tango
and
finished with the most violent of moves
a tear would run down
my surprised face
i was only defeated
when you made me come
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"Perhaps you feel very sensitive about the submission and would rather not have it dissected by user comments." yeah no shit. that's from the 'critique discouraged' option when submitting a deviation.
this is my second poem in my adult life and should be treated as such. i wish it was more refined but it isn't, and i'm not getting into this whole poetry business to make it better. i got encouraged to put it up as my friends who read it, liked it.
i was listening to italian opera or whatever (josh groban, andrea bocelli) at night and we'd been discussing all kinds of romance stuff with my friend earlier and so that inspired me.
i find it amusing that for the preview i'm using a stock photo from sxc.hu ( [link]), just slightly manipulated. i wanted something exactly like that...and was lucky enough to find it
this is my second poem in my adult life and should be treated as such. i wish it was more refined but it isn't, and i'm not getting into this whole poetry business to make it better. i got encouraged to put it up as my friends who read it, liked it.
i was listening to italian opera or whatever (josh groban, andrea bocelli) at night and we'd been discussing all kinds of romance stuff with my friend earlier and so that inspired me.
i find it amusing that for the preview i'm using a stock photo from sxc.hu ( [link]), just slightly manipulated. i wanted something exactly like that...and was lucky enough to find it
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I saw the Picture and the Poem is just Fitting perfectly, very good!